From 6420fda7716105d2c352baf642c38ee0dc7f828a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Mark <evenson@panix.com>
Date: Thu, 7 Jan 2016 05:27:34 +0100
Subject: [PATCH] Really edit all copy

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diff --git a/Drafts/privacy-blimp-launched-from-deck-of-tolkien.org b/Drafts/privacy-blimp-launched-from-deck-of-tolkien.org
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--- a/Drafts/privacy-blimp-launched-from-deck-of-tolkien.org
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@@ -14,11 +14,13 @@ CloudFleet HQ.  (Vienna/AT)
 
 ** Am Sandtorkai
 
-CloudFleet launched a new consumer privacy service from the decks of
-the J.R. Tolkien in Hamburg/DE.  Helping to answer the question of
-"What is to be done?" after the Snowden revelations of 2013 and
-onwards, the Blimp offers openly provable security as a consumer
-product.  Pledges to the crowdfunding 
+CloudFleet launched the crowdfunding for an innovative consumer
+privacy service from the decks of the J.R. Tolkien in Hamburg/DE.
+Helping to answer the question of "What is to be done?" after the
+Snowden revelations of 2013 and onwards, the Blimp offers openly
+provable security as a consumer product.  Individuals interested in
+verifiable secure use of Cloud services can now help influence our
+direction with pledges to this crowdfunding campaign.
 
 "We're actually doing this, huh?" wondered one of the Fellowship from
 the deck of the J.R. Tolkien berthed Am Sandtorkai.
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