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 CloudFleet launches privacy blimp from ship in Hamburg
 
-CloudFleet headquarters in Vienna today announced from the successful
-launch of a new consumer privacy service from the decks of the
-J.R. Tolkien in Hamburg, DE, last month.  Attempting to answer the
-question of "What is to be done?" after the Snowden revelations of
-2013 and onwards, the Blimp offers provable security as a consumer product.
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+CloudFleet HQ.  (Vienna/AT)
 
-Your data; your device: your Cloud!
+** Am Sandtorkai
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+CloudFleet launched a new consumer privacy service from the decks of
+the J.R. Tolkien in Hamburg/DE.  Helping to answer the question of
+"What is to be done?" after the Snowden revelations of 2013 and
+onwards, the Blimp offers openly provable security as a consumer
+product.  Pledges to the crowdfunding 
 
 "We're actually doing this, huh?" wondered one of the Fellowship from
 the deck of the J.R. Tolkien berthed Am Sandtorkai.
 
+** Your data; your device: your Cloud!
+
+The CloudFleet Blimps offers an alternative for current consumers of
+cloud services.  By using a Blimp, individuals may choose to stop
+being the product of so-called "free" servives, and pay for the
+benefits of an openly intergrated alternative.
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+** Data Autonomy
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+** Crowdfunding
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