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 CloudFleet launches privacy blimp from ship in Hamburg
 CloudFleet launches privacy blimp from ship in Hamburg
 
 
-CloudFleet headquarters in Vienna today announced from the successful
-launch of a new consumer privacy service from the decks of the
-J.R. Tolkien in Hamburg, DE, last month.  Attempting to answer the
-question of "What is to be done?" after the Snowden revelations of
-2013 and onwards, the Blimp offers provable security as a consumer product.
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+CloudFleet HQ.  (Vienna/AT)
 
 
-Your data; your device: your Cloud!
+** Am Sandtorkai
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+CloudFleet launched a new consumer privacy service from the decks of
+the J.R. Tolkien in Hamburg/DE.  Helping to answer the question of
+"What is to be done?" after the Snowden revelations of 2013 and
+onwards, the Blimp offers openly provable security as a consumer
+product.  Pledges to the crowdfunding 
 
 
 "We're actually doing this, huh?" wondered one of the Fellowship from
 "We're actually doing this, huh?" wondered one of the Fellowship from
 the deck of the J.R. Tolkien berthed Am Sandtorkai.
 the deck of the J.R. Tolkien berthed Am Sandtorkai.
 
 
+** Your data; your device: your Cloud!
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+The CloudFleet Blimps offers an alternative for current consumers of
+cloud services.  By using a Blimp, individuals may choose to stop
+being the product of so-called "free" servives, and pay for the
+benefits of an openly intergrated alternative.
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+** Data Autonomy
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+** Crowdfunding
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