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 ** Am Sandtorkai
 ** Am Sandtorkai
 
 
-CloudFleet launched a new consumer privacy service from the decks of
-the J.R. Tolkien in Hamburg/DE.  Helping to answer the question of
-"What is to be done?" after the Snowden revelations of 2013 and
-onwards, the Blimp offers openly provable security as a consumer
-product.  Pledges to the crowdfunding 
+CloudFleet launched the crowdfunding for an innovative consumer
+privacy service from the decks of the J.R. Tolkien in Hamburg/DE.
+Helping to answer the question of "What is to be done?" after the
+Snowden revelations of 2013 and onwards, the Blimp offers openly
+provable security as a consumer product.  Individuals interested in
+verifiable secure use of Cloud services can now help influence our
+direction with pledges to this crowdfunding campaign.
 
 
 "We're actually doing this, huh?" wondered one of the Fellowship from
 "We're actually doing this, huh?" wondered one of the Fellowship from
 the deck of the J.R. Tolkien berthed Am Sandtorkai.
 the deck of the J.R. Tolkien berthed Am Sandtorkai.